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The map shows changes in the Spanish city of Castéllion in recent times.

The map shows changes in the Spanish city of Castéllion in recent times.
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The maps illustrate information about the alteration of Castellion, which is the
city
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 of Spain, since 2000 till now.
Overall
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, there was a remarkable development at the present compared to 2000.
In addition
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, it is
readilly
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readily
 apparent that there was only
an
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one
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univertisty
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university
, which remained unchanged after
development
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the development
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 stage.
Initially
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, the train station was demolished, which was in place of the police station. The new train station was constructed at the new location, which was on the right side of the old position. The old market
also
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 was rebuilt at the opposite site via
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city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 at the present. Meanwhile, it was altered by the new shop.
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, the tree in the right top corner of
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city
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the city
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 was destroyed to build a new shopping
centre
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. It is worth noting that
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city
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the city
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centre
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was
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apply
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added a new function for
bike
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the bike
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retal
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rental
retail
 scheme.
Secondly
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, there
was
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are
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 lots of new
building
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buildings
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 in Castellion at
the
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apply
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present. The hall of residence was built newly at the left top corner. The airport
also
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are
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is
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 creating between the new shopping
centre
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 and the new covered market.
Beside
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Besides
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, two buildings
was
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were
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 constructed in the south of a road that was a cinema and bars and clubs.
Finally
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, a tramline was connected from the university to the
city
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centre
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 the road was changed its purpose for pedestrians only.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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