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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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The provided table compares six metropolises' underground railways in terms of their age, length, and annual number of
passengers
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.
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, London has the oldest and longest
railway
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system
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,
while
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 Tokyo manages to
attarct
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attract
 the highest number of commuters. With 394
kilometers
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kilometres
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 in length and a total number of 775 million
passengers
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, the London
railway
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 was the first underground
system
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 to be established in 1863,
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 the Paris underground
system
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, built 37 years later, serves 416 million more commuters annually. The Tokyo underground
system
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,
although
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 opened 27 years after the Paris
railway
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system
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 and shrunk in the
lenght
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length
light
 of the
railway
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, surpasses both countries with 1927
passengers
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 choosing
this
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system
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 for their communication. In terms of the newest
railway
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 stations, Washington
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railway
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Railway
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 attracted almost double the amount of Kyoto's and Los Angeles's
passengers
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, with 144 million
passengers
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, opened in 1976, with 126
killiometers
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kilometres
 of
route
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the route
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 it
also
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 overtakes these two countries in their age and
killometers
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kilometres
 as well.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, railway, system with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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