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Task 1 digram showing Brick manufacturing process

#digram #brick #process
The
digram
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 shows the steps of making bricks. There are seven steps starting by digging for clay and ending by
deliverying
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delivering
 the brick units to customers.
First,
by using a digging machine,
caly
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clay
 is collected from deeper layers of soil and
then
 clay is
palced
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placed
 on a metal grid to dry before going on a roller. Sand and water are added to the dried clay to form a
complaient
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complaint
mixture
.
This
mixture
 is shaped into brick units
iusing
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using
 two methods.
The
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 first method, a machine shapes the
mixture
 into big bocks which are cut using
awire
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a wire
aware
wire
 into smaller
unifed
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unified
 sizes
while
 the second method is by placing the
mixture
 in a mould. Afterwards,these
unites
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 are placed in a drying oven for 24-48 hours
then
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and then
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 transferred to a klin with
moderate
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a moderate
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tempertuare
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temperature
temperatures
 of 200-980
degree
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degrees
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 before going into a higher
tempertuare
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temperature
 kiln with 870-1300 degrees.
Finally
, the bricks will be placed in a cooling
champer
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chamber
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 for 48-72 hours before packaging and delivery.
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by separating ideas into distinct, clearly organized paragraphs.
task achievement
For even higher task achievement, elaborate more on each stage with connections or examples to fully convey the process and its sequence.
grammatical
Avoid minor spelling and grammatical errors for clarity, e.g., 'klins' should be 'kilns', 'complaint' should be 'compliant'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clear transitions between each stage to enhance the flow of the description.
task achievement
The essay provides a comprehensive step-by-step description of the brick manufacturing process.
coherence cohesion
The steps are presented in a logical order, which allows for clear understanding of the process flow.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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