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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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Given are two figures concerning Anthropology students` type of occupation after completing their undergraduate degree course from one university. The first illustrates their destination by
percent
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 the second provides data on the rates of their incomes after 5
years`
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years
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work
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of work
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.
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, what stands out is that more than half of the students pursued full-time
work
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 after graduation and a majority of them had an income of $100000 or more after 5
years`
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work
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of work
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. A glance at the supplied pie chart reveals that the percentage of graduates who chose part-time
work
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 is 15%;
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, merely 5% entered part-time
work
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 + postgrad.
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, 8
percent
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per cent
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 is allocated to full-time postgrad study, 12
percent
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per cent
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 remained unemployed and the rest had unknown jobs.
According to
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 the table, very few Anthropologists had earned $25000 or less in all types of employment,
on the contrary
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, half of them had gained more than 100000$ after 5
years`
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years
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work
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of work
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 in
government
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the government
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 sector. The percentage of graduates who
employed
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are employed
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 in
government
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the government
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 sector and freelance consultants
are
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is
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 the same, by 15%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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