Some people think that the environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. аф
Some
people
agree that environmental solutions
should be solved on a global scale but others believe it is better to decide them nationally. If problem
would be solving Fix the agreement mistake
problems
in
Change preposition
on
global
scale every Correct article usage
a global
country
will
be involved in Wrong verb form
would
this
and it is
will help solve the problem faster, but Unnecessary verb
apply
still
it will be better for everyone to deal Add a comma
still,
them
Change preposition
with them
in
nationally. I believe that every Change preposition
apply
solutions
Change to a singular noun
solution
need
to Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
decide
in silence without any problems.
First of all, Wrong verb form
be decided
solve with
environmental Wrong verb form
solving
solutions
in
nationally can be easy for Change preposition
apply
people
that
decide Correct pronoun usage
who
this
. It will be take
Change the verb form
take
little
time and effort. Correct article usage
a little
People
won’t have to spend their money for this
meet and ruin their schedule. For example
another year ago when in America happened disaster with their nature they need to solve this
faster. So after
this
news
every Add a comma
news,
country
connected to this
. So America’s president asked for help from another country
. Afterwards
when Add a comma
Afterwards,
people
from china
, Capitalize word
China
russia
and Italy Change the capitalization
Russia
are
gathered, a fire started in places where Wrong verb form
were
was
Correct pronoun usage
there was
conference
. 40 Correct article usage
a conference
people
were died. After that
the problems have become bigger. So, I believe that if they would Add a comma
that,
be solved
Wrong verb form
solve
this
solution in their country
in
nationally it would not lead Change preposition
apply
these
consequences.
On Change preposition
to these
other
hand, Correct article usage
the other
find
a solution Wrong verb form
finding
in
Change preposition
on
global
scale will be betterCorrect article usage
a global
,
because it helps Remove the comma
apply
for
another Change preposition
apply
country
share
Fix the infinitive
to share
with
Change preposition
apply
their decision
, knowledge and ideas with others. Everyone knows that it is not easy to Fix the agreement mistake
its decisions
solve
big decisions individually always. Verb problem
make
For
example
the situation that happened in Africa. Many years ago in Africa was Add a comma
example,
fire
disaster in every place. So to put out the fireCorrect article usage
a fire
were sent
all rescuers and firefighters from different countries Wrong verb form
,
who want
to help Wrong verb form
wanted
to
Africa. Change preposition
apply
Also
it helped to save half population and nature. It helps to deal Add a comma
Also,
this
problem faster. I believe that it is Change preposition
with this
good
decision for everyone and better to Correct article usage
a good
solving
Wrong verb form
solve
solutions
.
In conclusion, if you look at it from everyone’s point of view it is more efficiently
to deal with environmental Change the word
efficient
solutions
in
nationally. It will be faster, better and without any noise, but Change preposition
apply
this
is not fact
that Add an article
the fact
a fact
this
resolve
all problems.Change the verb form
resolves
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite