Some say that the standard of behavior among children has worsened and that this is their parents’ fault; others say that schools are to blame. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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children

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between

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wrong as they

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from their

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learn from their mom and dad as they are role

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. When their parent

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rude and

disrepectly

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disrespect

disrespected

cilldren

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children

may think it is fine to behave like that,

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the same as their

parents

did before.

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parents

have the

responsibility

to teach

children

how to behave in their daily life, like being polite to others,

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with others.

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parents

play an important role in guiding

children

how to perform. If

children

react wrong,

parents

have the

responsibility

to teach and control their

kids

. It may become

parents'

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fault.

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schools

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also

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children

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Schools

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the place where

students

learn and

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taught. Activities or lessons related to conduct should

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in school to help

students

to understand the standard of acting

properiately

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appropriately

or even being a good kid. Teachers

also

needed to control and stop

students

' bad

behavior

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to prevent it

happening

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again.

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children

should be taught about

the

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good conduct in

schools

. Both

parents

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schools

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an important role and

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the

responsiblity

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responsibility

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for

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students

behavior

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behaviour

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, I think

parents

take more

responsibility

as every

kids

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get

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different

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personality

that

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parents

understand their

kids

more than the

schools

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, those

mum

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and dad should teach their

children

to behave well by using their own parenting methods to fit in their

children

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to the

schools

, lessons, teaching materials or activities about conduct and

behavior

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are limited and

gereral

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general

which

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not designed by every

kids

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Therefore

, I think

parents

make mistakes if

children

act

inpropreate

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inappropriately

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Some say that the standard of behavior among children has worsened and that this is their parents’ fault; others say that schools are to blame. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree?

In many countries children are engaged in sorne kind of paid work. Sorne people regard this as complete/y wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

100.In many countries, the traditional family structure is changing, and an increasing number of children are being raised by single parents or by grandparents. Discuss the possible reasons for this trends and its potential consequences in society.