The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart gives data on the
quantity
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number
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of employees in five different kinds of jobs in a particular region of Australia between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, it can be seen clearly that most of these jobs witnessed an upward trend in their employees, except
accounting
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for accounting
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and farming. Notably,
while
sales held the highest number of workers, farming held the lowest number of employees. To be more specific, the initial figure for sales in 2001 was 157
thousand
,
then
it increased considerably to about 168
thousand
by 2008. The same trend can be seen in the figures for computing and nursing.
While
the former surged from 60
thousand
to approximately 80
thousand
, the latter rose slightly from 58
thousand
to 60
thousand
over the same period.
By contrast
, accounting and farming experienced a downward trend between 2001 and 2008. Both figures for these two jobs decreased significantly by about 10
thousand
, from 70
thousand
to 60
thousand
at the former and from 30
thousand
to 20
thousand
at the latter.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment trends
  • workforce
  • sector
  • industry
  • agriculture
  • services
  • economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • notable increases/decreases
  • statistical data
  • regional employment patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • percentage points
  • employment rate
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