The graph below shows how people buy music

The graph below shows how people buy music
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The line chart gives information about the percentage of total music
sales
by three methods, namely;
streams
,
downloads
, and
CDs
purchased. The most significant trend is the increase in stream
sales
from 2011 to 2018 compared to the other two
sales
methods. In detail, in the year 2011, the highest
sales
method was
CDs
which was approximately 55% compared to
streams
and
downloads
which were 5% and 32% respectively. By 2014, both
streams
and
downloads
increased significantly to reach 15% for stream
sales
and 43% for download purchases.
While
CDs
decreased dramatically to 35% in the same year. In 2018,
CDs
and
downloads
went down nearly to the same percentage 30%-28%.
In contrast
, stream purchase was the highest by over 40%.
To sum up
,
sales
of
streams
was
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the lowest purchased method in the given period
however
it became the highest
at the end
to reach over 40%
while
other methods were less than
this
percentage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, streams, downloads, cds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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