Some feel that tourism endangers culture while others feel it is beneficial. DIscuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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tourism industry, some argue that it could lead to negative effects in culture.
However
, others believe that it is
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. In
this
essay, both of these views will be discussed and supported by convincing opinions. On the one hand, tourist activities sometimes can damage the civilization of people. The presence of tourists may cause local residents to change their minds and beliefs. Some cultures will gradually fade away and be replaced by modern trends.
For example
, the trendy and fashionable outfits
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worn by some
travelers
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can influence local dress styles, leading to a shift away from traditional clothing.
Furthermore
,
travelers
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not only do destroy tradition but
also
enable to create pollution
such
as noise or the priority issue, air pollution. Most
travelers
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rely on automobiles for transportation, which emit toxic fumes into the atmosphere.
Due to
these effects, residents often move away from their
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, causing the original culture to disappear.
On the other hand
, the emergence of visitors may have benefits. The major advantage is that it can boost economic growth in
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and
also
gain profit
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local
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population.
For instance
, tourists are likely to film things and upload
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social media platforms, these attract people around the world to learn about the town, which can boost its popularity and increase tourism.
Moreover
, the government may prioritize new amenities or infrastructure
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improvements
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such
as better roads, improved public transportation, or hospitals to enhance the quality of life for residents and the growing number of visitors.
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everything that has been started so far, it is considered that both views are reasonable. In my opinion, I reckon that tourism can contribute to the decline of local culture.
However
, despite its disadvantages, it is evident that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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coherence cohesion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural erosion
  • cultural homogenization
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • cultural diversity
  • preservation
  • economic incentive
  • revival
  • authenticity
  • over-commercialized
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