Some feel that tourism endangers culture while others feel it is beneficial. DIscuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Owning to an increasing
of
tourism industry, some argue that it could lead to negative effects in culture. Change preposition
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this
essay, both of these views will be discussed and supported by convincing opinions.
On the one hand, tourist activities sometimes can damage the civilization of people. The presence of tourists may cause local residents to change their minds and beliefs. Some cultures will gradually fade away and be replaced by modern trends. For example
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travelers
can influence local dress styles, leading to a shift away from traditional clothing. Change the spelling
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Furthermore
, travelers
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also
enable to create pollution such
as noise or the priority issue, air pollution. Most travelers
rely on automobiles for transportation, which emit toxic fumes into the atmosphere. Change the spelling
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Due to
these effects, residents often move away from their hometown
, causing the original culture to disappear.
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hometowns
On the other hand
, the emergence of visitors may have benefits. The major advantage is that it can boost economic growth in town
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the town
also
gain profit to
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local
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the local
For instance
, tourists are likely to film things and upload on
social media platforms, these attract people around the world to learn about the town, which can boost its popularity and increase tourism. Correct pronoun usage
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Moreover
, the government may prioritize new amenities or infrastructure improvement
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improvements
such
as better roads, improved public transportation, or hospitals to enhance the quality of life for residents and the growing number of visitors.
To sum
up
everything that has been started so far, it is considered that both views are reasonable. In my opinion, I reckon that tourism can contribute to the decline of local culture. Add a comma
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However
, despite its disadvantages, it is evident that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.Submitted by esaraica on
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to better support your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure main points are consistently supported with evidence or examples.
task achievement
You successfully discussed both sides of the argument and provided a clear conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a logical flow, with clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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