The chart below shows number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the data of adults playing seven different sports from one area between 1997 and 2017, which is an interval of 20 years.
Overall
, it can be seen that among seven different sports, the most popular
game
is tennis with
maximum
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a maximum
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number of
players
during these years.
Then
, rugby and football almost share
the
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an
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equal proportionality of participation of
players
in these two games with
minute
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the minute
a minute
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difference
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differences
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in the
last
year.
Whereas
, the number of
players
towards the
game
,
cricket
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of cricket
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, has significantly decreased in 2017. The seven different games being played in the particular area
shows
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show
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rise and fall during
this
interval of twenty years. Tennis remained on the rise in 1997
where
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when
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approximately 50
thousand
adults took part in
this
game
and
further
rose
upto
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up to
55
thousand
in 2017.
On
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In
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the second place, rugby
players
increased
about
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by about
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18
thousand
players
in 2017 and reached under 50
thousand
players
. Comparatively,
footbal
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football
players
also
saw the same level of rise from 31
thousand
to above 45
thousand
players
. The
least playing
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least-played
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game
is
the
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apply
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cricket which faced a significant fall in the number of adult
players
, which
were
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was
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under 30
thousand
in 1997 and decreased
under
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to under
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10
thousand
players
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words game, players, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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