Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that competition is
significant
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thing to grow in any place.
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it is a commonly held belief that
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each other at work or school is a good and crucial thing , there is
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an argument that others believe we should try to
coallbroate
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collaborate
instead
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of competing against each other.
This
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essay will analyse
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
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hand, in
genral
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general
, the concept of competition
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us a sense of responsibility and provide our efforts to produce
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high results.
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, the majority of students have
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to compete
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others
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in their homework and assignments to get a considerable degree.
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, there are global companies
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a
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strict
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evaluate
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their employees, in order to demonstrate
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successful employee and give their
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equally.
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, if
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students or co-workers compete
each
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other respectfully, so they will boost their skills and get a high achieving.
On the other hand
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, others reckon we must to try collaborate more,
instead
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of compete each other. It is
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possible to say that spirit of cooperation is a significant part of any business or
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project
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.
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, a lot of people admit that
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cooperation
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can help to contribute more achievements and get a high performance.
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,
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collaborate
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collaboration
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can make a considerable project in
short
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period, teamwork is an important
skills
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at work or school.
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, football sports can not
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be played
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without one player ,
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reflected
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reflects
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the importance of
collaborate
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collaboration
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. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
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question. On balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that we should boost the concept of
collaborate
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collaboration
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at work or at school even at home, in order to get any
assist
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assistance
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in our society easily and
effortless
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.
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  • productivity
  • excel
  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
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  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
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