The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018..

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The
line-chart
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illustrates how many stores either closed or opened in a nation from 2011 to 2018. From an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the number
both
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closures and openings of shops decreased over the examined period in
this
country.
Moreover
,
although
the number of stores that opened was more than the stores that closed at the start of
period
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, the data became inverse in the final
year
. Regarding shop openings, about 8,500 businesses started their work in 2011,
this
figure declined dramatically during the first
year
by more than 4,500,
fallowed
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by a significant rise to just above 6,000
opening
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.
However
,
this
data experienced its second dramatic fall between 2014 and 2015
t0
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to
4,000. The number almost remained unchanged in
next
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to
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year
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before a gradual decrease to 3,000 in the
last
year
. In terms of markets that ended their work, around 6,200 businesses finished working in
first
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year
.
This
data fluctuated during the first four years of calculated time, before a very sharp reduction to 500 closures from 2014 to 2015.
Nonetheless
,
this
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statics
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statistics
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jump to just over 5,000 until 2016, and
it
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they
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fluctuate slightly during the two final years.
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