In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend latge sums of money on constructing new railway lines for fast trains in cities. Others believe the money should be spend on improving the existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion
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task achievement
Your essay touches upon the main points but needs to expand on them with more detail and depth. Try to develop each viewpoint with clearer explanations and stronger examples.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences lack clarity due to grammar and vocabulary issues. Practice writing more clearly by using straightforward sentence structures and checking for mistakes.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. The current essay could be improved by stating the main opinion in the conclusion more explicitly.
task achievement
You have made an effort to address both viewpoints presented in the prompt, which forms a good foundation.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraph structure shows an understanding of separating ideas, which helps in organizing them better.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion