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You recently receieved a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, 1. Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college 2. explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her 3. suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write atleast 150 words Begin your letter as follows, Dear .....................,

#friend #advice #college #job #idea #atleast
Dear Dhara, It would be a great idea to find a job over going to college.
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 my opinion, going to college is not an easy task on a daily basis as you need a huge motivation to wake up in the morning, attend classes
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to keep up with the course work and
also
 do assignments or homework given which are not easy tasks. If you find a job, you always have the motivation to go to work as you would be paid for the tasks you do. It is
also
 interesting as you don’t have any commitment other than to perform the duties at the time of work. I would suggest starting with an
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 position in a retail store.
This
 would be a wonderful experience for you in the long run as you have planned to open up a retail store on your own. With
this
 opportunity, you would get to
know
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insights
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 the operation
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 a store.
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task achievement
Consider elaborating more on specific aspects of why college might not be enjoyable, such as the financial burden or the lack of practical experience, to provide a more balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a smooth transition between the points on why college might not be enjoyable and why finding a job can be beneficial, perhaps by using connecting phrases.
task achievement
The letter maintains a friendly and engaging tone, which is suitable for personal advice to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The ideas are well-organized, with each paragraph focusing on a different aspect of the argument.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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