The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.
The given line graph provides information about
percentage
of club members’ participation Add an article
the percentage
to
three types of courses. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, the data were recorded over the 20-year period from the year 1995 to 2015.
Overall
, it is observed upward trend in two courses until 2010, namely team
sports
and gym activities
, while
in swimming we see
a significant decrease until 2010, which means it was less popular among these three Wrong verb form
saw
activities
.
To begin
with, 50% of club members were going
swimming in 1995 and Wrong verb form
went
this
figure was dwindling
to 15% until 2010 and stayed the same Wrong verb form
dwindled
during
5 years, Change preposition
for
while
we notice the
identical trend in Correct article usage
an
team
sports
from 2010 to 2015.
Looking at in
Correct pronoun usage
it in
details
, Fix the agreement mistake
detail
team
sports
and gym activities
showed increasing
trend, which meant people had more interest in these areas. After 2010, Add an article
an increasing
in
Change preposition
apply
team
sports
participation declined to 32% from 40% until 2015. In contrast
, in gym activities
the figure stopped at 27% in the Add a comma
activities,
last
5 years.Submitted by i.nureddinn on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words team, sports, activities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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