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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle moreof their waste?

#people #waste #homes #governments #requirement #laws #moreof
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 rubbish is recycled. As of
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, it is argued that a law should be considered in order to
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 awareness of recycling. I believe that restrictions should be considered for many reasons. There is no doubt in my mind that global warming is a significant problem nowadays. As the world is becoming more populated, a larger scale of human waste is more common.
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 of
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 citizens do not take care of their garbage, which
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 the levels of carbon dioxide.
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 think the government should consider paying fees for breaking the law of not dividing trash in people's homes. It is
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 important to remember that recycling waste has the benefit of giving second life
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plastic
 that
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the worlds
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the wellbeing of the world
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wellbeing
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. If restrictions
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 it is quite likely that they
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 be more cautious about
plastic
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 for more
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 one time.
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, there are already factories around the world that
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 the service of reviling used
plastic
 bags and bottles,
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 minimizes the
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 changes.
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, the action of being stricter about reusing undisposable packages
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 a greener future for us. As global warming is becoming a major issue, it foreshadows the crises that can come with it if changes will not be provided.
In other words
, applying laws for giving another life for
plastic
 can
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ensure
 a greater future.
That is
 why, in my opinion, regulations should most
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definitely
 be added to citizens homes in order to save our planet.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more logically from paragraph to paragraph, ensuring a clear progression from introduction to conclusion.
Task Achievement
Develop your ideas further to make your argument more compelling. This can involve providing more support and examples for your claims.
Grammar & Accuracy
Proofreading your essay can help you catch small grammatical errors, which will make your writing clearer and more professional.
Task Achievement
The essay clearly states a position on the issue of recycling laws, providing a clear stance from the beginning.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively bookend the essay.
Task Achievement
You provide relevant examples, such as the 2015 project about the impact of not recycling in the USA, to support your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mandate
  • compliance
  • penalties
  • public awareness
  • environmental impact
  • campaigns
  • infrastructure
  • economic incentives
  • deposit-return systems
  • corporate responsibility
  • packaging waste
  • recyclable materials
  • waste management
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