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There is a trend in the 21 century in which people are turning to alternative healing like Ayurveda and homoeopathy over allopathic medicine. Discuss the Advantages and disadvantages of this approach.

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Improve sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity and fluency.
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Include an introduction and a conclusion to give your essay a clear structure.
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Provide more specific numerical data directly related to each category to make the essay more comprehensive.
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The essay includes an overview and description of trends over time.
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Different activities are analyzed separately, giving specific focus to categories like film club and martial arts.

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