You rent a flat with your friend who is moving out. It is too expensive for you to pay the rent alone. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter: 1. Explain the situation. 2. Describe why you would like to stay in this flat. 3. Ask the landlord if you can find another flatmate. Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin you letter as follows: Dear_______,
Dear Landlord,
I am writing to tell
that
my friend, who is living with me in your flat is thinking of moving to another Correct pronoun usage
you that
place
soon.
Having said that, from 15 January, she is going to live with her brother who is coming to study here in Canada. Thus
, It will be just me who will be left in the flat eventually it is going to become difficult for me to arrange whole
rent alone since I am a student and work 20 hours per week only.
Correct article usage
the whole
Although
I have two choices of either moving to different
Add an article
a different
place
or with my friend but
I think Remove the conjunction
apply
this
flat is like home to me from the time I came to Canada, I have been residing here. And I have a lot of memories attached to this
place
. Therefore
, I am just trying to stay here as long as I can. Plus, you always have been so supportive and helpful.
Hence
, I wish
you can help me here too. Verb problem
hope
Although
I have already started looking for the other
roommate and messaged a lot of known colleagues about the Fix the agreement mistake
another
place
, I will be grateful if you can help me finding
someone Wrong verb form
find
too
live in the Replace the word
to
appartment
with me.
I will look forward to Correct your spelling
apartment
hear
from you.
Regards
SimranChange the verb form
hearing
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Grammar and Vocabulary
Consider proofreading your text for minor grammatical mistakes, such as 'tell' instead of 'inform', 'two choices of either moving' could be simplified to 'the choice of moving'.
Task Response
A little more detail about why this flat feels like home could enhance the reader's understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
While the letter is clear, adding a summarizing concluding sentence could improve closure.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter is clear, with a distinct introduction, body, and conclusion.
Task Achievement
The tone is polite and appropriate for a letter to a landlord.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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