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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
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The bar chart
desmonstrates
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demonstrates
 the proportion of movies created by A,
B
, C , D and E
countries
 from 2007 to 2009. Generally, A and
B
countries
 produced the most films
while
 C, D and E
countries
 had the fewest production in three years. Nation A had the largest
presentage
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percentage
 of movies , with almost 90% in 2007 and 2008, Nation
B
 was in the middle, which
respresented
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represented
 half of the proportion, the remaining nations only had between 10 and 20 productions. In 2009, Country A
producted
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produce
produced
less
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fewer
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 films, which only reached 80%
while
 all other
countries
 created more compared to the
pervious
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previous
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 year. With
B
 country increased
almost
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by almost
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 20%, which was the largest rise.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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