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The chart below shows the percentage of immigrants Australia had from 5 different countries in 1962, 1982 and 2002.

The chart below shows the percentage of immigrants Australia had from 5 different countries in 1962, 1982 and 2002.
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The bar chart illustrates the changes in the
proportion
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 of
immigrants
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 to Australia from five countries (New
Zealand
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, Vietnam, Italy,
UK
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the UK
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, and India) for in three different years.
Overall
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, by 2002, Italy had one of the highest proportions of
immigrants
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 to Australia among these countries.
While
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 the immigrant population from New
Zealand
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 and India showed a steady increase, the UK experienced a sharp decline, and Vietnam saw a rapid increase followed by a slight decrease. In detail, both New
Zealand
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 and India had upward trends. Starting at about 7% in 1962, the
proportion
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 of
immigrants
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 from New
Zealand
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 rose modestly to
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approximately 12% in 2002,
while
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 India’s
proportion
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 doubled to 14% by 1982 and remained unchanged for the next two decades.
In contrast
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, other countries showed different patterns. In 1962, the UK had the highest immigrant
proportion
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 at 45%, which dropped dramatically to around 9% in 1982 and stayed at that level until 2002. Vietnam, which had no recorded
immigrants
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 in 1962, surged to over 20% by 1982, before slightly declining to about 17% by 2002. Meanwhile, Italy’s immigrant
proportion
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 fluctuated, ending at just over 25% in 2002, making it one of the most significant groups by the end of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, immigrants, zealand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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