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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The graph illustrates the number of openings and closures of shops in one country from 2011 until 2018.
Overall
, it shows that both variables went down with
a
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time, experiencing a tremendous downward trend for the amount of shops that were closed in 2015.
To begin
 with, we can notice that
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except
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 one
year
 the closures were fluctuating. The outbreaking time was the
year
 2015 when the number drastically decreased by around 6k during the one
year
.
On the other hand
,
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significand
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significant
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 moment when it comes to openings was the beginning of the analysis. In
a
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year
2012
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2012,
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 the number of openings was 4,5 k lower than in
the
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2011.
However
, numbers
through
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 the rest of the analysis timetable
in
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a
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the
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 subject of new shops
is
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 fluctuating.
To conclude
, we
oberve
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observe
observed
 a trend of fluctuation and
slight
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a slight
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 decrease between 2011 and 2018 in a presented graph with a few
drastc
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drastic
 downturns.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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