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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organization. What might be the cases? What could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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People
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 have different opinions about workers choosing to be
freelancers
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instead
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 of working in a
company
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. I believe
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 because
people
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 who a
freelancers
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 could manage
time
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 more flexibly, and the shortcoming is the income is unstable. I will discuss my view in
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 essay.
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the development of technology is booming,
people
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 who have a computer and internet can
work
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 anywhere, like a cafe shop, home, or even at a star hotel beside a beautiful beach. Nowadays, the living mode has changed,
people
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 would like to experience the world more than just sit in a little city,
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,
due to
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 technology ,
people
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 can choose to
work
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 as
freelancers
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, escape their traditional
work
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 style, and take
time
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 control themselves.
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the disadvantage of being self-employed is the salary is unstable. Because a freelancer, is not in-house
work
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,
freelancers
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 are not employed by a
company
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,
freelancer
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 need to create their own income by receiving a case.
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,
that is
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 no promise that every month will have enough projects that could get, which would cause self-employed can not afford daily outcomes.
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, the self-employed do not have a
company
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 to fix problems with clients, the self-employed need to take
whole
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 responsibility
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 clients, the
company
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 has law teams but the self-employed do not, that would be a challenge is bad
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 happens,
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 a disadvantage too. In conclusion,
people
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 who decide to be self-employed might be because they could be their own master
instead
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 of working at a
company
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 for life, life is short and
time
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 is precious, so being a freelancer could use
time
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 more flexibly. Meanwhile, the disadvantage of it is the salary would be unreliable
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 because self-employed would not know where is the next project.

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Task Achievement
The introduction is clear and outlines the main points of the essay effectively. Make sure to connect all parts of your argument seamlessly for a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay presents clear ideas, but ensure transitions between points are smooth to improve clarity. Additionally, consider expanding upon the examples provided to make them more specific and relevant.
Task Achievement
The essay provides a concise and relevant introduction, effectively setting the stage for the discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay concludes effectively by summarizing the main points raised.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas presented are coherent and follow a logical progression, which contributes to easy reading.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomy
  • align
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • advancements in technology
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • financial rewards
  • constraints
  • employee benefits
  • administrative tasks
  • financial instability
  • job insecurity
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