Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of planets and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Environmental issues have been widely debated across all levels of
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society
in recent years. Some suppose that the problem of the disappearance of certain species of
animals
and planets is the most major and acute,
while
others believe that there are more important difficulties in ecological systems. I think that there are more serious problems
such
as
climate
change
, which entail not only the extinction of species
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but
also
consequences for
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society
. On the one hand, especially in recent
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society
causes
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invaluable damage to the environment, which entails
disappearance
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the disappearance
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of
animals
and planets.
Peoples
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excessively
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nature for production and
businesses
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. There
are
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active deforestation, accumulation of landfills and waste disposal.
Thus
,
flora
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is dying and
animals
are being deprived of the most important thing - their habitat, which will
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to
loss
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the loss
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of them too.
Moreover
, in our modern world still
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poaching which is aimed specifically at killing
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the rarest
animals
.
Such
damage to our biosphere is not recoverable and will blow to the economic development of
society
.
On the other hand
, people can fairly consider that there are more serious difficulties, like worldly
climate
change
. According
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this
view
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it is
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more
complicative
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complicated
phenomenon.
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, changes
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temperature strongly affect the melting of glaciers.
This
deprives the habitat of Arctic
animal
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animals
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and simultaneously will cause flooding and rising sea levels. Floods can sweep away urban slums, destroying homes and livelihoods among
poorest
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people. At the same
time
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climate
change
will cases of droughts and the reduction of suitable places for growing crops. I would agree that
this
is
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examples
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the
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dangers of changing weather conditions. In conclusion, even though some believe that
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the loss
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extinction
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or extinction
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of species is
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problem
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environment
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, there are
consequently
more dangerous processes, which
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the future of our planet. I believe, that only
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work of all countries can affect threats
such
as
climate
change
and it is our duty
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to
this
.
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