Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of planets and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Environmental issues have been widely debated across all levels of
the
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society
in recent years. Some suppose that the problem of the disappearance of certain species of animals
and planets is the most major and acute, while
others believe that there are more important difficulties in ecological systems. I think that there are more serious problems such
as climate
change
, which entail not only the extinction of species,
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also
consequences for whole
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the whole
society
.
On the one hand, especially in recent time
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times
society
causes
invaluable damage to the environment, which entails Wrong verb form
has caused
disappearance
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the disappearance
animals
and planets. Peoples
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People
used
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use
businesses
. There Fix the agreement mistake
business
are
active deforestation, accumulation of landfills and waste disposal. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Thus
, flora
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the flora
animals
are being deprived of the most important thing - their habitat, which will led
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lead
loss
of them too. Add an article
the loss
a loss
Moreover
, in our modern world still flourish
poaching which is aimed specifically at killing Correct subject-verb agreement
flourishes
of
the rarest Change preposition
apply
animals
. Such
damage to our biosphere is not recoverable and will blow to the economic development of society
.
On the other hand
, people can fairly consider that there are more serious difficulties, like worldly climate
change
. According of
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this
view
it is Add a comma
view,
much
more Correct article usage
a much
complicative
phenomenon. Correct your spelling
complicated
For example
, changes of
temperature strongly affect the melting of glaciers. Change preposition
in
This
deprives the habitat of Arctic animal
and simultaneously will cause flooding and rising sea levels. Floods can sweep away urban slums, destroying homes and livelihoods among Fix the agreement mistake
animals
poorest
people. At the same Correct article usage
the poorest
time
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time,
climate
change
will cases of droughts and the reduction of suitable places for growing crops. I would agree that this
is impressive
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an impressive
examples
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example
the
dangers of changing weather conditions.
In conclusion, even though some believe that Change preposition
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loss
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the loss
extinction
of species is Correct word choice
or extinction
major
problem Add an article
a major
the major
of
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for
environment
, there are Correct article usage
the environment
consequently
more dangerous processes, which endangering
the future of our planet. I believe, that only Wrong verb form
endanger
combined
work of all countries can affect threats Correct article usage
the combined
such
as climate
change
and it is our duty contribute
to Fix the infinitive
to contribute
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