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Band 4

In many countries,the amount of household waste like food packaging is increasing.

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Many countries around the world are packaging
food
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 much more than
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normal,so
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 is causing wastage.
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 essay will examine the main causes and possible solutions to
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 problem. Admittedly,overpackaging
food
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 mat one of the main
issue
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issues
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 in many areas.First and foremost,individuals are purchasing products more than they need.
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, if a woman buys a lot
to
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 her family to save them at home,as saving products for a long ages,the quality of them can be awful.
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,a woman needs to take
them
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 rubbish out.So,the more people generate overconsumption,the more nations struggle with solving
issue
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the issue
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 of
food
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wasting
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.
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,households are purchasing a large amount of cuisines because of affordable and cheap prices.They can even get
anyting
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anything
 they desire without any bargain in many circumstances.They,
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,have
tendency
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a tendency
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 to
make
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wastage
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waste
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of
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production even if they do not
realize
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realize it
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.
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,some possible solutions can be found as well.One of them might be making people
awareness
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aware
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 by social media,TV or radio.The consequences of
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 argument should be presented and discussed.
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 way,realization in people's minds might be grown.
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,to tackle
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this
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these
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 concerns,government officials should raise the cost of
foods
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food
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.As an example,
while
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 a man does shopping with
great
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 deal of products,after setting a high value,he can not afford to
overpurchase
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over purchase
over-purchase
 on a daily basis.
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 can be
great
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 remedy to deal with reducing the size of packaged production. In conclusion,overpackaging foods has a negative
impacts
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impact
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 on
food
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 production;
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,we can significantly lessen
by
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it by
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 increasing costs and raising awareness among citizens.

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Clear and Comprehensive Ideas
Clarify your main points by providing more precise and detailed explanations. Avoid vague terms like 'main issue' or 'consequences' without specifics.
Relevant Specific Examples
Make sure your examples are relevant and directly support your points. Consider using specific statistical data or well-known facts where possible.
General linguistics and grammar
Proofread your essay for grammatically incorrect sentences and awkward phrasing. While it does not significantly impact your score, more accuracy helps in clearly conveying ideas.
Overall Structure
Your essay successfully includes both an introduction and conclusion, providing a clear structure.
Logical Structure
There is a logical flow of ideas from causes to solutions, aiding in understanding your argument.
Successful Main Points Identification
You correctly identify overconsumption and affordable prices as causes of increased waste and propose raising awareness and prices as solutions.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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