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Many cannot speak or present well in public. Some people think that it is important to speak well in public, so the training should be from school. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that communication with other people is a crucial thing for us as humans.
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 it is a commonly held belief that you should know how to express your ideas in public, there is
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 an argument that opposite it. In my opinion, I consider that everyone has different goals in their lives, and knowing how to talk could help
this
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 goal or not.
To begin
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 with, it is clear to the naked eye that speaking
skills
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 are one of the basic
skills
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 that everyone should learn from school until they become adults.
In other words
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, it is a skill that you need to use from the first day you start walking to the
last
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 day of your life.
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, learning how to talk will give you more confidence in jobs that require meeting lots of people. Another point to consider, even if you learn speaking
skills
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 in school, it is not necessary that you use them in your actual life.
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, if you choose to be a computer programmer, everything you need to do is write some codes on your laptop or your personal computer. In that case, you cannot consider yourself a failure person just because you do not prefer to speak in front of other individuals. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that it is a good thing to teach children the
skills
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 of speaking in school. Because these
skills
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 will help the children in one way or another.
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