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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
provides
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provide
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 data
of
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on
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 the populations by age in two countries, Italy and
Yemen
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, in 2000 and
its
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their
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 prediction
in
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for
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 2050.
It is clear that
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 more than
a
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apply
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half of
the
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apply
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Yemen
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's population is between the ages of 0 and 14,
whereas
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 61.6% of the residents are aged between 15 and 59 in Italy.
Also
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, the oldest
group
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 in
Yemen
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 only takes 3.6% of the
popuation
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population
,
however
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, almost a
quater
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quarter
 of Italians are over 60 years old. Focusing on the 2050 charts, the proportions of the youngest
group
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 in both countries are going to decline by 12.9% and 2.8%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the middle
group
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 is expected to see an increase of slightly more than 10% in
Yemen
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. The proportion of the counterparts over 60 in Italy will rise significantly to 42.3% in the future, becoming almost the same as that of the 15-59 year
group
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. At the same time, the old residents in
Yemen
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 take a mere 5.7% of the population even 40 years later.
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, in four decades, the majority of the populations in
two
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the two
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 regions will be between 15 and 59 years
.
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old.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • young population
  • mature population
  • aging society
  • demographic shift
  • proportion
  • dominant
  • balanced distribution
  • projected increase
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