In future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemtent?

These days, the number of
people
who
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online news and
books
increase
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, so populations think that in the
future
no one will buy
paper based
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paper-based
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these
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apply
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items owing to the
fact
that they will have access to free
type
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types
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of them
in
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the Internet. I do not subscribe to
this
idea inasmuch as some
people
who will have
eyes
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matters cannot use
electronila
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electronic
electronica
gadgets and a group of
people
will like
raeding
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reading
real
books
or
newspaper
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newspapers
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for their smell. On the one hand, the community that have
eya
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a
problem
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problems
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or would like to have
a
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apply
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healthy
eyes
do not spend all
time
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their time
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on the tools that
coonet
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connect
to the Internet like tablets, phones, and so on
on
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account of
teh
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the
fact
that the light of these devices
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the
eyes
;
additionally
, in the
future
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future,
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the problems of the global
inahbitants
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inhabitants
are like the now;
as a result
, some
people
use published both newspapers and
books
.
On the other hand
, some
people
believe that when populations smell
the
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paper, they will follow
books
and
newspaper
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newspapers
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; in
fact
,
they
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apply
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real
books
and newspapers help them to read and feel
betetr
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better
. To illustrate, a lot of my friends prefer
that
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to
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borrow
books
from libraries
instead
of reading online
books
with out
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without
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paying
due to
the
fact
that they feel
realxed
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relaxed
with printed
books
.
Therefore
,
this
type of
people
won't
not
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apply
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change their opinion about the method of reading in the
future
.
To sum up
, online
publishe
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publishing
will be
cheapest
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the cheapest
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way of reading not only
books
but
also
news in the
future
;
nevertheless
, communities whose
eyes
will be really essential and
feeling
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feel
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better when they will touch
books
won't use
Internet
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the Internet
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for reading.
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