You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefe

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Dear Mr Collin, I would like to introduce myself, I am Andrea and live at your college and share a room with another student. Unfortunately, I have

problem

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with my roommate, he is so loud every evening if I want to learn for the next day,

also

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want to tidy up your side of the room. And during the weekend he has so noisy party with other students from college. I have tried to talk with him,

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but

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he still

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with troubles, I am without a

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to make an agreement with him. I would like to kindly ask you if you can

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explain

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situation to him and help me to make a solution. Currently, if you have other accommodations available where I

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not to share the room with another student, I would be so happy. I appreciate your help and resulting

this

situation. Kind regards, Your

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student

Andrea Kroupa

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Ensure accurate grammar and vocabulary use, such as correcting 'don't' to 'doesn't' and 'your side' to 'his side.'

coherence cohesion

Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas or sections of the letter. For instance, start a new paragraph when you explain your problems.

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Provide more specific details about the issues, e.g., how often the parties occur or how the noise disrupts your work, to fully address the task requirement.

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Clear description of the problematic situation with the roommate, providing context.

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Polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for this type of communication.

coherence cohesion

Presence of greeting and closing, making the correspondence appear formal and structured.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

155 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
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