The table and charts give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006.

The table and charts give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006.
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The table and charts illustrate many
doctors
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in Australia and their distribution by gender and birthplace across the years 1986, 1996, and 2006.
Overall
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, the number of
doctors
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showed a higher rate in 2006,
while
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in terms of gender, males experienced a downward trend and the proportion of Australian-born
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was
initially
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higher than that of overseas-born
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. In 1986, the number of
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stood at 23,720. It grew considerably each decade, reaching 35,450 Australian
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at the end
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of the
period
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. In the beginning, a lot of
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were Australians, whose proportion was just over 60%
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overseas
doctors
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accounted for approximately 37%.
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, after a two-decade
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,
however
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, there was a rapid increase in the part of non-Australians and
due to
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the drop
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Australian
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, by 2006, both categories comprised 50% each. Regarding gender, the majority of
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were male, levelling off around 75% in 1986,
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females made up about half the part of male
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.
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, female
doctors
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rose from around 25% in 1986 to 35% in 1996, and nearly 40%
at the end
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of the
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,
although
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males experienced a gradual decline over the
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, reaching roughly 68% and 60% in the years 1996 and 2006, respectively.
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