The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares figures for travelers
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
like
visiting Caribbean islands between 2010 to 2017.
Wrong verb form
liked
It is clear that
the total number
of tourists that prefer both is the most popular throughout the period shown. Also
, while
the number
of visitors
staying on island
Add an article
the island
has
fluctuated steadily Unnecessary verb
apply
in
2013 to 2015, the Change preposition
from
number
of visitors
staying on island
has less Add an article
the island
figure
but Fix the agreement mistake
figures
trend
Fix the agreement mistake
trends
increase
every year.
Wrong verb form
increased
According to
the graph, In 2010, around 1 million
tourists stayed both, while
visitors
staying on island
and cruise
ships
had about 750,000 people and 250,000 people respectively. In 2011 has number
rose slightly all
. Correct determiner usage
apply
However
, in 2012 visitors
on cruise
ships
has
a small drop equally in 2010. Wrong verb form
had
Moreover
, the number
of visitors
staying on cruise
ships
was steadily around 1.5 million
from 2013 to 2015.
By 2016, the number
of people staying on cruise
ships
has decreased moderately by about 1.3 million
. By contrast
, visitors
staying on the island
have increased gradually. In 2017, the total number
of visitors
who preferred both going top marks at 3.5 millions
including Change to singular
million
visitors
on cruise
ships
reached the peak at 2 million
. While
,
Remove the comma
apply
visitors
on island
Add an article
the island
has
the same Wrong verb form
had
number
of visitors
in
2013 to 2015.Change preposition
from
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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