The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares figures for travelers
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
like
visiting Caribbean islands between 2010 to 2017.
Wrong verb form
liked
It is clear that
the total Linking Words
number
of tourists that prefer both is the most popular throughout the period shown. Use synonyms
Also
, Linking Words
while
the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
staying on Use synonyms
Use synonyms
island
Add an article
the island
has
fluctuated steadily Unnecessary verb
apply
in
2013 to 2015, the Change preposition
from
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
staying on Use synonyms
Use synonyms
island
has less Add an article
the island
figure
but Fix the agreement mistake
figures
trend
Fix the agreement mistake
trends
increase
every year.
Wrong verb form
increased
According to
the graph, In 2010, around 1 Linking Words
million
tourists stayed both, Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
visitors
staying on Use synonyms
island
and Use synonyms
cruise
Use synonyms
ships
had about 750,000 people and 250,000 people respectively. In 2011 has Use synonyms
number
rose slightly Use synonyms
all
. Correct determiner usage
apply
However
, in 2012 Linking Words
visitors
on Use synonyms
cruise
Use synonyms
ships
Use synonyms
has
a small drop equally in 2010. Wrong verb form
had
Moreover
, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
staying on Use synonyms
cruise
Use synonyms
ships
was steadily around 1.5 Use synonyms
million
from 2013 to 2015.
By 2016, the Use synonyms
number
of people staying on Use synonyms
cruise
Use synonyms
ships
has decreased moderately by about 1.3 Use synonyms
million
. Use synonyms
By contrast
, Linking Words
visitors
staying on the Use synonyms
island
have increased gradually. In 2017, the total Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
who preferred both going top marks at 3.5 Use synonyms
millions
including Change to singular
million
visitors
on Use synonyms
cruise
Use synonyms
ships
reached the peak at 2 Use synonyms
million
. Use synonyms
While
Linking Words
,
Remove the comma
apply
visitors
on Use synonyms
Use synonyms
island
Add an article
the island
has
the same Wrong verb form
had
number
of Use synonyms
visitors
Use synonyms
in
2013 to 2015.Change preposition
from
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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