The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares figures for travelers
that
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who
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like
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liked
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visiting Caribbean islands between 2010 to 2017.
It is clear that
the total
number
of tourists that prefer both is the most popular throughout the period shown.
Also
,
while
the
number
of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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has
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apply
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fluctuated steadily
in
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from
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2013 to 2015, the
number
of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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has less
figure
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figures
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but
trend
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trends
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increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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every year.
According to
the graph, In 2010, around 1
million
tourists stayed both,
while
visitors
staying on
island
and
cruise
ships
had about 750,000 people and 250,000 people respectively. In 2011 has
number
rose slightly 
all
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.
However
, in 2012
visitors
on
cruise
ships
has
Wrong verb form
had
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a small drop equally  in 2010.
Moreover
, the
number
of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
was steadily around 1.5
million
from 2013 to 2015. By 2016, the
number
of people staying on
cruise
ships
has decreased moderately by about 1.3
million
.
By contrast
,
visitors
staying on the
island
have increased gradually. In 2017, the total
number
of
visitors
who preferred both going top marks at 3.5
millions
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million
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including
visitors
on
cruise
ships
reached the peak at 2
million
.
While
,
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apply
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visitors
on
island
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the island
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has
Wrong verb form
had
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the same
number
of
visitors
in
Change preposition
from
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2013 to 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million, cruise, ships with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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