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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares figures for travelers
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
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like
Wrong verb form
liked
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 visiting Caribbean islands between 2010 to 2017.
It is clear that
 the total
number
 of tourists that prefer both is the most popular throughout the period shown.
Also
,
while
 the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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fluctuated steadily
in
Change preposition
from
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 2013 to 2015, the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
island
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the island
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 has less
figure
Fix the agreement mistake
figures
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 but
trend
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trends
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increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 every year.
According to
 the graph, In 2010, around 1
million
 tourists stayed both,
while
visitors
 staying on
island
 and
cruise
ships
 had about 750,000 people and 250,000 people respectively. In 2011 has
number
 rose slightly 
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
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.
However
, in 2012
visitors
 on
cruise
ships
has
Wrong verb form
had
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 a small drop equally  in 2010.
Moreover
, the
number
 of
visitors
 staying on
cruise
ships
 was steadily around 1.5
million
 from 2013 to 2015. By 2016, the
number
 of people staying on
cruise
ships
 has decreased moderately by about 1.3
million
.
By contrast
,
visitors
 staying on the
island
 have increased gradually. In 2017, the total
number
 of
visitors
 who preferred both going top marks at 3.5
millions
Change to singular
million
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 including
visitors
 on
cruise
ships
 reached the peak at 2
million
.
While
,
Remove the comma
apply
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visitors
 on
island
Add an article
the island
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has
Wrong verb form
had
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 the same
number
 of
visitors
in
Change preposition
from
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 2013 to 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stable
  • Dramatic rise
  • Gradual decline
  • Visitor numbers
  • Period
  • Data points
  • Rapid growth
  • Comparison
  • Tourism trends
  • Economic factors
  • Natural disasters
  • Marketing promotions
  • Seasonal variations
  • Impact
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