The charts below illustrate the market share of different smartphone brands in Russia and the amount imports that occurred in three consecutive years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart visualized the
overall
market percentage of various brands
in smartphone sales
in Russia, including the imports, which begin in
the end of 2019 to middle Change the preposition
at
through
2021.
Change preposition
of
Overall
, the information presented showed that Samsung
and iPhone
placed at
second and third most Change preposition
apply
sales
phones in Russia. Surprisingly, other brands
that dominated the market were Samsung
, Xiami
, Oppo, and Vivo. Correct your spelling
Xiaomi
While
the iPhone
and other brands
turned down from 2019 to 2021.
To begin
, at the quartal 4 in 2019, Samsung
and iPhone
shared the same sales
percentage, which was 18%. While
chinese
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Chinese
brands
only reach 8% and other brands
reach 40%. Following
this
, the
same Change preposition
in the
quartal
in the next year, which was 2020, there was a slight increase in people buying iPhones in Russia since it reached 21%. Correct your spelling
quarter
Instead
, this
year, Samsung
just went down to 16%. However
, in 2021 there are twisting trend of market sales
among samsung
and Change the capitalization
Samsung
iphone
. Correct your spelling
iPhone
While
Samsung
was
increased, Unnecessary verb
apply
Iphone was
Verb problem
the iPhone
significant
dropped to the lowest Change the adjective
significantly
sales
. this
conditions affected Correct determiner usage
These
other smartphone brand
in Change the wording
another smartphone brand
other smartphone brands
sales
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