Some people believe that it is better to live and work in vertical cities. Others, however, think that horizontal cities are better for living and working. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In contemporary times, lifestyle of the individuals has changed a lot as they have started living in the concrete jungles. It is considered by some individuals that it is better to be housed in
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the
a
the
tall buildings Correct article usage
apply
whereas
, others argue that houses
are better. Upcoming will discuss some points explaining both the
viewpoints. I believe living in Correct article usage
apply
house
is better rather living in Add an article
the house
a house
the
Correct article usage
an
apartments
.
On the one side, as most of the skyscrapers are in the city centre Fix the agreement mistake
apartment
so
it makes commuting to work easy. Correct word choice
apply
As most
of the offices and Change preposition
Most
the
other facilities like grocery stores, health clinics and parks Correct article usage
apply
accessible
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are accessible
for
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to
the
dwellers. It can save Correct article usage
apply
time
and cost of travelling. Moreover
, building
are more secure Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
place
to live as each building Fix the agreement mistake
places
have
a security guard and security cameras. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Hence
, living in skyscrapers can save time
of
dwellers as all the Change preposition
for
facilites
are nearby.
On the other side, Correct your spelling
facilities
houses
are more space and have more privacy. Every houses
Change to a singular noun
house
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
the
Correct article usage
a
seperate
entrance and garden which Correct your spelling
separate
make
them more spacious and Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
provides
more privacy. People living in the house can make changes in their house Correct subject-verb agreement
provide
according to
them whereas
, it is not possible in the buildings. Therefore
, houses
are more roomy and no interference of
Change preposition
from
the
other people.
I believe that having a single story Correct article usage
apply
accomodation
is more comfortable because it Correct your spelling
accommodation
provide
Change the verb form
provides
as
personal space to an individual where one can reside with their family for Correct your spelling
a
the
long Change the article
a
time
.
Correct your spelling
Considering
Cinsidering
all the points above, Correct your spelling
Considering
although
skyscrapers are Correct article usage
a
the
good option for a person as he or she would not Correct article usage
a
require
to travel a lot Wrong verb form
be required
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to
for
important places like Change preposition
to
Fix the agreement mistake
markets
market
, health clinics and a jobFix the agreement mistake
markets
but
at the same Remove the conjunction
apply
time
, houses
are private property where one can do whatever they want and its
more roomy.Replace the word
it's
it is
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Provide more specific examples or evidence to support the claims made in each paragraph. This would strengthen your argument and make the essay more persuasive.
introduction conclusion present
The essay clearly introduces the topic and identifies both perspectives as well as your own opinion.
task achievement
You effectively discuss both viewpoints with balanced consideration, showcasing an understanding of different perspectives on the issue.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion sums up the arguments and restates your opinion, providing a coherent ending to the essay.
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