The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.
The bar chart illustrates the
expenditure
on six consumer goods in four European countries: Germany, Italy, France, and
Britain
.
Overall
, it is noteworthy that the majority of spending occurred in
Britain
,
while
Germany recorded the lowest
expenditure
across all categories.
According to
the chart,
Britain
spent the highest amount on photographic
film
, which accounted for approximately £170,000.
Additionally
,
Britain
spent over £160,000 on
toys
and CDs, surpassing the other countries. Interestingly, spending on tennis racquets and personal stereos in
Britain
was equal;
however
,
this
spending remained lower than that on perfumes. In France, the
expenditure
on
toys
and CDs was equal, with only a slight difference in spending on perfumes, tennis racquets, and personal stereos. Photographic
film
was the top category for spending in France, exceeding £160,000. As for Germany, the
expenditure
on CDs, perfumes, and tennis racquets was around £155,000,
while
personal stereos recorded only £150,000. Their spending on
toys
and photographic
film
was almost similar. In Italy, spending ranged around £150,000 to £155,000, except for
toys
and photographic
film
, where the figures were slightly higher.
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