Public celebrations (festivals, national day) are held in some countries. Some people think that they are very expensive and the government should spend money on some other important issues. Do you agree or disagree?

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host some
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celebrations
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for
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in many countries . But
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think
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waste
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a waste
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of
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they have to spend
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to
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other important
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am agree
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government
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waste
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alot
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a lot
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on festivals and other functions.
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, they have too
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pending to do .
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, in some cities repair of roads , making
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schools
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. But nobody
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action against them . Some
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sleep without eating and they don'
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have
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roads.
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do
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only.
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they give grants to
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lower-level
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political members
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but they don'
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do proper work and all
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money
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the money
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it for
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their own
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homes. Somehow that's the reason behind it.
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, in my city the same thing
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give
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grants
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making
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roads and
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schools
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but the main leader
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do any work and just
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a festival in
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and
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all
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the public
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they have to take action against political numbers. We have to give
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to the educator person who
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us
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those who just
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money
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what they do only
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public because they
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power and make groups and strike against them. I know some
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powerful
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voice
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murders too. But we have to come together and stop it.
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all things going well.
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introduction
Provide a clearer and more structured introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss in your essay. This will help readers understand the direction of your argument from the outset.
content development
Develop a more balanced discussion by considering possible benefits or counterarguments to spending on public celebrations.
coherence
Work on improving the logical flow of your ideas. Ensure that each paragraph clearly supports your main argument and transitions smoothly to the next.
conclusion
Include a concluding paragraph that summarizes your main points and reiterates your overall argument, strengthening the conclusion.
content
The essay expresses a clear position on the issue, supporting the view that government spending on celebrations can be excessive.
examples
Some relevant examples are provided, such as road and school funding issues, which help to illustrate the argument.

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