nowadeays many medical research projects are funded by private compnies. in your opinion , do you think that resersh shoul be carried by private companies , individuals or government? give reasons for your answer

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In today's reality
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almost every medical research
projects
are financed by private
compnies
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companies
and as
an
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every situation
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it has positive and negative effects.
Personally
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i
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think
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that medical
researches
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should be conducted by private
compnies
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companies
but under
the
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goverments
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governments
government
control. I believe that when medical research
projects
is
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carried out by private
companies
, the
reasult
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results
and
effectivnes
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effectiveness
effective
of
its
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their
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pruduct
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products
is
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are
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fast, advanced and
costumer oriented
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customer-oriented
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.
This
fact
proved
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during covid-19
pandemy
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pandemic
,
where
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when
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governments were
stragling
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struggling
straggling
for creating
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and
produsing
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producing
effective
vaccine
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vaccines
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against
coronavirus
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the coronavirus
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.
On the other hand
the
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private
companies
such
as "Pfizer-Bionech"
imediatelly
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immediately
developed and produced
vaccine
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vaccines
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.
This
fact illustrates
positive
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sides of
private
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the private
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sector.
On the other
hand
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when medical
projects
is
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conducted by private
companies
, without
governments
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government
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control, it provides power and monopoly to
thoose compnies
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those companies
. In my
oppinion
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opinion
, at
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the same
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same
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some
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point it is
dangerose
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dangerous
.
This
fact is testified by NGO
researchs
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research
about the prices of
Hiv
medication.
According to
theese
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these
researches
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hiv
medicine
is
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created by a private company, which
have
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monopoly
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a monopoly
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on the
phramacy
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pharmaceutical
industry in
USA
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the USA
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.
As a result
the company constantly
rises
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Hiv
drug's
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prices.
Coorespondingly
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to that,
low income
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individuals are having
truble
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trouble
to purchase
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purchasing
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Hiv
medicine. Taking everything into
concuderation
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consideration
,
i
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I
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suppose that medical research
projects
should be carried
by
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private
companies
but under the control of constitutional law and Governments.
This
way societies could avoid
monompolization
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monopolization
monopolisation
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coherence cohesion
Strengthen your argument with more persuasive and detailed explanations.
task achievement
The essay provides relevant examples, such as the development of the COVID-19 vaccine by Pfizer-BioNTech, to support its points.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, aiding the structure of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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