nowadeays many medical research projects are funded by private compnies. in your opinion , do you think that resersh shoul be carried by private companies , individuals or government? give reasons for your answer

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almost every medical research
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are financed by private
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every situation
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it has positive and negative effects.
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that medical
researches
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research

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should be conducted by private
compnies
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companies

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goverments
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control. I believe that when medical research
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is
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carried out by private
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, the
reasult
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results

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and
effectivnes
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effectiveness
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of
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pruduct
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products

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is
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fast, advanced and
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customer-oriented

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fact
proved
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during covid-19
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pandemic

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where
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governments were
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struggling
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for creating
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and
produsing
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producing

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effective
vaccine
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vaccines

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against
coronavirus
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the coronavirus

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.
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the
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apply

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private
companies
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such
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as "Pfizer-Bionech"
imediatelly
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immediately

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developed and produced
vaccine
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vaccines

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fact illustrates
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sides of
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sector.
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hand
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when medical
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is
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conducted by private
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, without
governments
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control, it provides power and monopoly to
thoose compnies
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those companies

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same
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point it is
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dangerous

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fact is testified by NGO
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research

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about the prices of
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medication.
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theese
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researches
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hiv
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medicine
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created by a private company, which
have
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monopoly
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on the
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pharmaceutical

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industry in
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the company constantly
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Hiv
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drug's
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prices.
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individuals are having
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to purchase
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Hiv
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medicine. Taking everything into
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consideration

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suppose that medical research
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should be carried
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private
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but under the control of constitutional law and Governments.
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way societies could avoid
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monopolization
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, aiding the structure of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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