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The table above gives information about the amount of tax collected (as% ofeGDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.

The table above gives information about the amount of tax collected (as% ofeGDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.
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The table provides data on how much tax
gathered
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 in 5 countries in the years 1975,1985,1995 and 2005.
Overall
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,
although
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 all nations experienced
the
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an
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 upward
trend
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,
Sweden
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 was at the highest level throughout the all years,
which collected
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collecting
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 the largest amount of
fee
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fees
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. Focusing on
Sweden
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 and
USA
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the USA
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,they stood at 46% and 25,1% in the initial
year
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 and reached 47% and 25,4% respectively.By 1995,America showed a slight
increasing
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 of 27,1%,
while
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Sweden
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 had a noticeable growth of 51%.
Then
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,in the final
year
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,
Sweden
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 gathered the largest rate of tax,levelling off
70,1
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at 70,1
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%,
whereas
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USA
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the USA
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 rose moderately by 27,4%. In terms of Korea,
Japan
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 and
Turkey
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,they were almost
at
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on
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 the same
trend
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,
stood
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standing
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 at 15,1%,15% and 16,4% respectively.By the second
year
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 of the table,Korea had
the
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an
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 upward
trend
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 of 27%,
whereas
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Japan
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 and
Turkey
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 plummeted to 16% and 15% respectively.
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,Korea faced a small decline
with
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of
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 1%,
decreased
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which decreased
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 to 26% and both
Japan
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 and
Turkey
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 came across with marked growths of 23% and 24% respectively.
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,in the
last
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year
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,
Japan
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 stood at the highest percentage among
three
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the three
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 nations above,having an upward
trend
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by
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of
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 32,1%.
Turkey
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's rate was 27,4%,growing
with
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by
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 3,4% ,
while
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 it
was noticed
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had
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 a gradual increase
by
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of
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 27,3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, sweden, year, japan, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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