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It is thought by some that life is better in a city. Others, however, prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#life #city #countryside
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Some
people
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 argue that living in the
city
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 is better than in the
countryside
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.
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 I think both have advantages and disadvantages, it depends on
people
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's ages Some
peole
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people
 claim that
city
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 life
has
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 more fun. Everything is close and
people
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 can access
to
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anything they want.
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, if you want to go out, you have
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plenty of options
such
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 as coffee shops, theatres, bars, restaurants, and shopping malls.
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, I personally think when we want to climb mountains or swim in the ocean, we can just go on
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holiday for a few days.
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, big cities usually have nice parks, so they can enjoy nature in the
city
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 as well. I agree with the idea of more options in the
city
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, especially when you are young and working, it is nice to have more activities to enjoy.
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,
people
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 who live outside of the
city
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,
they
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prefer to have a calm and peaceful life. I think it is good because they don'
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 need to go through traffic every day or they don'
t
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 need to be stuck in the crowd.
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, living in the
countryside
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 doesn'
t
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 mean they can'
t
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 go to the
city
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. They can drive there on the weekend or anytime they want. In terms of the accessibility to diverse facilities, these days everything can be
delievered
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delivered
 right in front of the door, so they don'
t
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 need to make time to do shopping. Even buying new clothes and hanging out with friends are occasional events, so it doesn'
t
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 change the quality of their lives. In my opinion, since
people
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 don'
t
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 need to commute after retirement, it can be a good choice to move to
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countryside
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the countryside
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. In conclusion, I think it is still nice to live in the
city
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 for the young,
whereas
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 when you have
family
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a family
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 and
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are setteled
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setteled
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settled
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wil
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will
 be better in the
countryside
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.
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task response
Ensure you address all parts of the task thoroughly. You've done well by discussing both city and countryside living, but consider providing more balanced comparisons or additional examples.
coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your thoughts with clear topic sentences and concluding sentences for each paragraph to enhance logical flow and coherence.
coherence and cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion that tie the argument together, which enhances understanding.
task response
The writer presents a clear preference in the conclusion, neatly summarizing their viewpoint about city vs. countryside living.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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