It is often said that to become a successful business a tertiary education is not at all necessary. To what extent you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.
It is often argued that completing a degree in
university
helps people
success
. I disagree with Replace the word
succeed
this
statement, whereas
I think a tertiary education can be helpful in some ways.
First,
I think going to university
can be beneficail
in two ways. You can have a deeper knowledge about your field and you can Correct your spelling
beneficial
also
make connections with people
who can give you great opportunities. Although
having a tertiary education doesn't make people
successful, in a few fields, such
as science, I believe studying in
Change preposition
at
university
can particulary
be beneficial. Imagine if you want an experiment, having your own laboratory would cost a lot Correct your spelling
particularly
especially
in your early twenties. Add the comma(s)
, especially
While
you are studying, you can find out what you really like more specifically and make a clear vision of yourself instead
.
However
, I still believe that you can run a business successfully without any tertiary education degree. First of all, there are things that you can't learn through a bachelor
or a Change noun form
bachelor's
master
degree. Change noun form
master's
For example
, communication skills are important because it
can give a good impression on customers, other companies, or buyers as well. Correct pronoun usage
they
Furthermore
, we can already find many good examples in our lives. CEOs, like Steve Jobs, who
got expelled from universities or dropped their studies in order to follow their dreams. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Therefore
, I believe if you are passionate about something, there is always a way to learn those things.
In conclusion, I don't think going to university
to achieve your dream is not nacessary
at all. Correct your spelling
necessary
People
should not set a limit and should think they can learn everything everywhere.Submitted by dob.jeong on
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