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The following chart shows the results of a British survey taken in 2009 related to housing preferences of UK people.

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The bar chart illustrates the results of a British survey taken in 2009 connected to housing preferences of UK residents.
According to
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 the data presented, the highest percentage was for apartments in
Liverpool
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,
whereas
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, terraced houses
also
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 in
Liverpool
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 were the lowest, with almost 60% compared to roughly 10% respectively.
Additionally
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, apartments in
Manchester
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 were nowhere near as astronomical as in
Liverpool
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 (20% and 58% in order),
besides
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, in
London
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 with 39%.
Next,
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terraced houses in
Liverpool
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 were not as massive as in
London
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, with about 10% against 20% respectively, and terraced homes in
Manchester
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 (more than 10%).
Furthermore
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, detached homes in
Liverpool
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 (nearly 15%) were not as formidable as in
Manchester
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 (35%), what is more,
London
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 with 25% in the same major.
Finally
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, semi-detached homes in
London
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 were as massive as in
Manchester
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, with approximately 37.5%,
while
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, in
Liverpool
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, the percentage was 17.5%.
To conclude
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, the most rather housing was in
Liverpool
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 at apartments with an enormous number,
on the contrary
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, in the same city terraced houses were amazingly falling.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words liverpool, manchester, london with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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