The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.

The graph shows the average Japanese month salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white televisions and color televisions during the same period.
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The line graph illustrates how much money (
Yen
)
is
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was
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earned on average in one month between 1953 and 1983, and the prices of black and white
televisions
and colour
televisions
at the same time.
Overall
, the costs of colour
televisions
and black and white
televisions
decreased over time,
while
the monthly average salary increased over the period of time. In 1953, the
price
of a black and white television was 110
thousand
Yen
,
whereas
the monthly salary was just below 20
thousand
Yen
. After that, in the next 10 years, the
price
of black and white
televisions
significantly dropped and reached 40
thousand
Yen
just before 1963 and that
price
continued to decline slightly until 1983, when it was around 25000
Yen
in 1973 and 20
thousand
Yen
in the year 1983 respectively, which is around five times lower in its initial level.
The colour
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televisions
started their journey nearly 1963, when their
price
was 100
thousand
Yen
,
however
, their
price
also
fell dramatically in the next 30 years, when they showed around 67
thousand
Yen
in 1968, 55
thousand
in 1975, and just below 50
thousand
in the year 1963, which is almost half of its primary level.
On the other hand
, the average rose slowly until 1970, when it was approximately 22
thousand
Yen
,
then
increased slightly above 32
thousand
in 1976, later escalated considerably in 1963 and reached around 67
thousand
.
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