The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1957 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1957 and 2007
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The line graph shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four Brighton attractions in the period from 1980 to 2010. We can see that
popularity
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the popularity
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of attractions fluctuated wildly, except for
Festival
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the Festival
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line graph - it was almost constant, changed just a little. At its peak was Festival with almost 50 per cent in 1995,
in contrast
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to Pier,which was about four times less visited ,
near
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nearly
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12% in 1995. From the start Art Gallery gained some popularity,being more visited than
Pavilion
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the Pavilion
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and Festival from 1980 to 1985 with its highest point at 37%.
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However
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However,
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from 37% in 1985 to
1990
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1990,
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the Art Gallery graph fell down to less than 20% and from 1990 was steadily falling from 20% to lower than 10%, being
overcomes
Wrong verb form
overcome
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by Pier in 2005. One of the most famous attractions at
first,
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Festival
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the Festival
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was visited by 30% of
tourist
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tourists
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in 1980. In the period from 1970 to 1995
line
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the line
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went down steadily,
then
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in 1995-2010 had a small rise up to about 37%

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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