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A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited describe where you stayed and what you can do there give one negative aspect about the destination (204)

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Dear Rohit, I hope you’re doing well. Today, I’m writing to suggest a destination for your holiday. I have recently visited the Blue Mountains, which is a holiday destination. It’s in the northern part of the Valley where I live.
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 will make you feel the experience of the streets of Italy, as
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 from every corner of the
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 is mesmerizing, particularly, during the fall season. When I went to
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, I stayed there for a week with my boyfriend, and we had an Air (BNB) bread and breakfast booked for us. It is a cheaper option than resorts at
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 because they are quite expensive even for a single night. You can do countless activities at
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, as it offers trailing, hiking, and many other rides
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, so there is no chance of you getting bored.
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, there is just one negative aspect about
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, that we cannot find our traditional food, and for
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 you will have to travel to a nearby town and buy all the groceries at once for one week. All the best, Sakshi
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structure
Ensure to clearly separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs for better readability. For example, separate the activities description from the accommodation details.
content
Try to elaborate more on why the lack of traditional food is a concern to strengthen your task achievement.
tone
You have maintained a friendly and informal tone appropriate for a letter to a friend.
structure
The letter includes a greeting and a closing, which structure the letter well.
content
You provide personal experience and practical tips, making your recommendation reliable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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