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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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pie
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Island
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let's
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decrypting
describing
pros
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the pros
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 and cons
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are
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befints
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benefits
befits
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the cultre
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culture
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are
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also
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senecry
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scenery
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enormous
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an enormous
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precentage
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percentage
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accomindation
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accommodation
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hand,
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disadvantages
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percentage
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cost
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living
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population
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the population
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previously
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quality
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difference
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conclusion
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parties
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concentrate
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apply
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pros and cons and
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selecting and reporting other
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scenic beauty
  • peaceful environment
  • wildlife viewing
  • limited accessibility
  • high costs
  • lack of amenities
  • tourist experience
  • perceived strongly
  • overwhelmingly stands out
  • main features
  • key advantages
  • primary disadvantages
  • notable aspects
  • common perceptions
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