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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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highlights the data about the most successful exporters of pineapple in 2009 and 2019, and the pie chart illustrates the information on how the cost of pineapple
is
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 obtained in 2019.
Overall
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, there were three representatives that sold the fruit.
The country
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Country
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 B was
on
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 first place and the
last
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 one was
country
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Country
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 C in 2009.
In
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 the end of
research
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the research
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,
the
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apply
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country A increased
the
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 sales and became the leader of the list.
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, the most of funds went to transportation and a
little
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small
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 part was needed to export. As shown in
chart
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the chart
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, not all exporters became more successful. The fastest growth is visible from the first column from approximately 1.5 to 10,1
millions
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 metric tonnes.
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, the past leader B decreased sales from about 4,5 to 1,8.
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, the biggest part of consumption was
retails
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retail
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.
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Also
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 taxes and profit needed the same amount of money with
one sixth
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. The smallest was export cost. A little more was spent on
producer
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the producer
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 of pineapples.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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