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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts illustrate the opinions of Bowen Island accumulated by
visitors
of
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it
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, which are divided into positive and negative opinions.
Overall
, the most skeptical opinion about Bowen Island was
high
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cost
 of living which relatively accounts
over
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 two times than other categories.
Secondly
, the most positive opinion was about the citizens of Bowen Island and the scenery. To describe in more detail, 50% of
visitors
 surveyed that
high
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cost
 of living was
bad
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 factor for their stay. And the second biggest disadvantage was entertainment which records 25% of all surveys. And food quality and weather follow after, with respectively 10% and 15%. The complaint about four factors except
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cost
 of living
are
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 relatively smaller than
high
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cost
 of living.
In contrast
, 42% of
visitors
 answered that the people were good
to enjoy
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 their travel. And
similarly
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 the scenery
gave
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positive
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 impact on
visitors
, which recorded 35%. The other two factors, culture and good accommodation each record 11% and 12%, and it is 3 times smaller than other factors that
gave
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 good impacts.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scenic beauty
  • peaceful environment
  • wildlife viewing
  • limited accessibility
  • high costs
  • lack of amenities
  • tourist experience
  • perceived strongly
  • overwhelmingly stands out
  • main features
  • key advantages
  • primary disadvantages
  • notable aspects
  • common perceptions
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