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The table shows information about students studying at an Australian university in 2009

The table shows information about students studying at an Australian university in 2009
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This
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 table compares the
percentage
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 of
students
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, who studied at an Australian university in 2009.
Overall
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, the highest
percentage
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 of women were studying in the
humanities
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, with the second highest
percentage
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 of
students
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, who were born outside of Australia studied
physics
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 and computer science compared to the three groups,
while
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 non-native English speakers studied information
technology
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. Per cent of women
students
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 was the highest in studying
humanities
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 at 72%,
while
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 the least was in learning engineering at 15%. The second largest of their knowledge was in
education
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, which constitutes 68%. Training
physics
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 and science were similar at 56% and 52%.
Moreover
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, the
education
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 of information and
technology
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 was at 17%. Regarding Australian
students
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 whose first language was not English, the most educated were those in
technology
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, at 49%.
While
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 learning engineering and science were similar, at 42% and 45%.
Physics
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 was average, at 38%. The lowest
percentage
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 of
students
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 in
education
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 were in
humanities
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 and
education
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, which were similar, at 12% and 16%.
By contrast
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, the highest
percentage
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 of
education
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students
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 who were born outside Australia, was the same in
physics
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 and information
technology
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 at 56% and the lowest was similar in
humanities
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 and
education
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 which account for 20% and 23%. Learning engineering was at 48%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, humanities, physics, technology, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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