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The diagram below shows how energy is produced from coal. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how energy is produced from coal. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram gives information about how
electricity
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generated
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was generated
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 from coal
and
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how
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 it was processed
by
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in
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 different stages and how it was used for needed
electricity
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 for houses and industries.
Overall
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, coal was collected from
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mine
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mines
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 and
process
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processed
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it
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apply
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by
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in
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 many different stages
from
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apply
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mine
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apply
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to make useful
electricity
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 for
house
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the house
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 and industrial uses.
At
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In
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 the beginning, coal
collected
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is collected
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 from the
mine
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 and
then
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, crushed using a crusher machine
after
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and after
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 that
transport
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transported
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it
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apply
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to
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the gassfier
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gassfier
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gasifier
 where it burns and
turn
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turns
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 into
gas
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. The process
also
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 leaves solid waste which
was
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is
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the
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apply
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part of the coal and it
also
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 leaves toxic gasses through the cooler
thereafter
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,
gas
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transferred
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is transferred
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 into a cooler and
process
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the process
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continue
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continues
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 to the end of
it's
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its
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 processes and
put
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puts
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gas
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 into a
gas
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 power point.
Moreover
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,
gas
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 power
point
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points
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 convert
gas
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generate
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to generate
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electricity
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 to supply
electricity
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 to houses and industries. That's how
electricity
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produced
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is produced
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 by processing
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mine
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mines
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 to houses and industries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, mine, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extraction
  • preparation plant
  • impurities
  • conveyor belt
  • turbine
  • generator
  • high-pressure steam
  • boiler
  • cooling tower
  • emissions
  • environmental impact
  • scrubbers
  • closed-loop system
  • condenser
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