The diagram below shows how energy is produced from coal. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The diagram gives information about how
electricity
generated
from coal Add a missing verb
was generated
and
it was processed Correct word choice
how
by
different stages and how it was used for needed Change preposition
in
electricity
for houses and industries.
Overall
, coal was collected from mine
and Replace the word
mines
process
Wrong verb form
processed
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
by
many different stages Change preposition
in
from
Change preposition
apply
mine
to make useful Correct pronoun usage
apply
electricity
for house
and industrial uses.
Add an article
the house
At
the beginning, coal Change the preposition
In
collected
from the Add a missing verb
is collected
mine
and then
, crushed using a crusher machine after
that Correct word choice
and after
transport
Wrong verb form
transported
it
to Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct article usage
the gassfier
gassfier
where it burns and Correct your spelling
gasifier
turn
into Correct subject-verb agreement
turns
gas
. The process also
leaves solid waste which was
Wrong verb form
is
the
part of the coal and it Change the article
apply
also
leaves toxic gasses through the cooler thereafter
, gas
transferred
into a cooler and Add a missing verb
is transferred
process
Correct article usage
the process
continue
to the end of Change the verb form
continues
it's
processes and Replace the word
its
put
Wrong verb form
puts
gas
into a gas
power point.
Moreover
, gas
power point
convert Fix the agreement mistake
points
gas
generate
Fix the infinitive
to generate
electricity
to supply electricity
to houses and industries. That's how electricity
produced
by processing Add a missing verb
is produced
mine
to houses and industries.Replace the word
mines
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, mine, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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