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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Your neighbour keeps his/her pet outside in the garden and this is causing some inconvenience for you and your family. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter: say what the problem is explain how it is affecting you and your family suggest a possible solution

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Dear Grace, I am writing with regard to your dog, which you usually keep outside in the shared garden of our building. It is causing an inconvenience to my grandparents, as they find it difficult to go out of the building when
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 dog is roaming around in the garden. As my grandparents recently moved
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 my apartment, they are new to
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 environment and are facing some difficulties
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 with the place. They both are scared of dogs, whenever they have to go out of the building, they have to call someone to take them out, which is not always possible. It would be great
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 if you could tie your dog somewhere in the corner of the garden
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 of just leaving it around
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 so that my family members and other people
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 the building can commute without any fear. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sakshi Syal

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To enhance specificity, consider including a few more details about how the dog disrupts the daily activities of your grandparents or other family members.
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Consider dividing the paragraph that explains the problem and its effects for improved readability. This would help to clearly separate the issue from its impact.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy for the reader to follow.
task achievement
The tone is polite and appropriate for addressing a neighbor, especially when discussing an inconvenience.
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The request for a solution is reasonable and clearly stated, showing consideration for both parties.
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