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The maps below show the centre of a small town called lslip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called lslip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#maps #show #centre #town #lslip #plans #development #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The maps
compares
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between
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the
centre
 of
tiny
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a tiny
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town
 which
called
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is called
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a slip
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slip
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Slip
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 in the present
in addition
plans
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to plans
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 for its
development
.
Overall
, the maps display various
of
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buildings in Leslie
town
centre
 nowadays
whic
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which
 there
a
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apply
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little
of
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facilities
while
,
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 planned
development
 has been
increaseing
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increasing
 change in the future . First of all, one of
main
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the main
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change
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changes
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think
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was introducing in the north of
planned
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the planned
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development
such
 as new residential, car park shopping
centre
 and bus station
.
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Secondly
secondly
 the main road was removed to
erected
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erect
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 pedestrians only. In the south map of planned
development
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development,
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 they built dual carriageways
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, in addition,
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in addition
 there was new housing
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, in contrast,
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in contrast
 there are two housing in lsilp
town
centre
 now. On the one hand, in the southwestern the school was in the same location. The park that located in
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the lsilp
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lsilp
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Lsilp
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town
centre
 now was bigger than the park in
planned
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the planned
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development
.
finally
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 the shop unchanged
in
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on
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the
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both maps.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, town, development with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • centre
  • small town
  • current state
  • development plans
  • maps
  • features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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