The maps below show the centre of a small town called lslip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps
compares
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between
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the
centre
of
tiny
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town
which
called
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a slip
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slip
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in the present
in addition
plans
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to plans
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for its
development
.
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, the maps display various
of
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buildings in Leslie
town
centre
nowadays
whic
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which
there
a
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little
of
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facilities
while
,
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planned
development
has been
increaseing
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increasing
change in the future . First of all, one of
main
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change
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think
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was introducing in the north of
planned
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the planned
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development
such
as new residential, car park shopping
centre
and bus station
.
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Secondly
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the main road was removed to
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pedestrians only. In the south map of planned
development
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development,
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they built dual carriageways
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in addition
there was new housing
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there are two housing in lsilp
town
centre
now. On the one hand, in the southwestern the school was in the same location. The park that located in
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the lsilp
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lsilp
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Lsilp
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town
centre
now was bigger than the park in
planned
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the planned
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development
.
finally
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the shop unchanged
in
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the
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both maps.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, town, development with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • centre
  • small town
  • current state
  • development plans
  • maps
  • features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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