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The graph shows the divorce rate according to educational background by gender in 1995.

The graph shows the divorce rate according to educational background by gender in 1995.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
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 getting divorced categorised into 8 bars by their educational degree and gender in 1995.
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,it can be seen that the highest percentage of divorce rate was in
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 who dropped out of school and the lowest was in
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 who were more than college graduates.
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 of individuals who dropped out early from high school,the divorce rates were high in both males and females which were a fourth and a fifth respectively.The rate in the
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 of
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 who had college degrees followed closely at nearly the same proportion but the rate of women occupying 24% was higher than men which was 20%. The rates of the other two groups were lower: 17% of males in high school graduated and 19% of females in the same
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 ended their marriage.In the more graduated
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,women and men had lower divorce rates with slight differences between men and women which were 15% and 14% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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